Interest Check [OVA]

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Re: Interest Check [OVA]

Post by EpicEclipse » Tue Jun 19, 2018 3:00 pm

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Here and willing, here goes my fragment

Aki's fingers curl and tighten the grip of the amathite crystal, as he narrows his eyes. Hard pressing each word, he grunts "Ryuseiken!" And the crystal flashes with people light, turning into a sword! Next, in a blink, Aki appears behind his foe, having delivered a thousand strikes! Aki makes the motion of sheathing the sword, which turns into the small fragment of amathite it was before, as the noise creature dissipates
For the sake of uniformity, I would prefer you used english attack names. Obviously the characters are speaking japanese, but as we're not all fluent speakers of the language, i would just prefer we stick to english. (Otherwise it feels really odd with one person using japanese words and phrases while no-one else is)

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Re: Interest Check [OVA]

Post by Camus » Tue Jun 19, 2018 8:51 pm

EpicEclipse wrote:
Tue Jun 19, 2018 3:00 pm
Camus wrote:
Tue Jun 19, 2018 1:30 pm
Here and willing, here goes my fragment

Aki's fingers curl and tighten the grip of the amathite crystal, as he narrows his eyes. Hard pressing each word, he grunts "Ryuseiken!" And the crystal flashes with people light, turning into a sword! Next, in a blink, Aki appears behind his foe, having delivered a thousand strikes! Aki makes the motion of sheathing the sword, which turns into the small fragment of amathite it was before, as the noise creature dissipates
For the sake of uniformity, I would prefer you used english attack names. Obviously the characters are speaking japanese, but as we're not all fluent speakers of the language, i would just prefer we stick to english. (Otherwise it feels really odd with one person using japanese words and phrases while no-one else is)
Agreed. Replace with "Meteor sword attack!"
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Re: Interest Check [OVA]

Post by Doctor Malsyn » Tue Jun 19, 2018 9:25 pm

Ryochi's eyes flash behind his mask as he holds his pen like a conductor's baton. "Tall and proud, the barbarian Brutus raises his sword..." Ink seeps fourth from the brass tip , hands moving slowly and methodically as the story took hold. "For there was no foe he could not best, no man, monster, or god who could surpass his strength...!" The kanji formed in mid-air, his words forming the basis of this minor epic. In a flash, the words burnt with white fire to match their auhtor's own. Each kanji shot forward in a uniform blitz, making a straight bee line into memory devoruing monstrosities before them. "Tirade Of A Thousand Words!" He called fourth as the words impacted to cause a small explosion of light, carving a swath of destruction in their ranks.
How about this? I was picturing it a bit like a spell for the big ones like this. :D
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Re: Interest Check [OVA]

Post by EpicEclipse » Sat Jun 23, 2018 1:29 pm

So for the uniforms when transformed, thinking something along these lines;
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As you can see, while there is a general design similarity, there is also plenty of personalized variety. You obviously don't have to pick one of those to represent your character, it's just meant to be a reference for the style of transformed outfit.

I am still working on the stats for the transformed form, but it's definitely going to give at least 2 ranks of Tough for extra HP and Vigorous for extra Energy. So by all means don't worry about adding weaknesses like Lethargic or Frail. Your transformed state will augment this.

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Re: Interest Check [OVA]

Post by Camus » Sat Jun 23, 2018 2:11 pm

What about this? Had the same military uniform feel, if more simple Image
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Re: Interest Check [OVA]

Post by EpicEclipse » Sat Jun 23, 2018 11:15 pm

Yup, that's fine. :D

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Re: Interest Check [OVA]

Post by Doctor Malsyn » Sat Jun 23, 2018 11:36 pm

Ey, works for me. For personalization, how about the jacket is longer and flowing, accompanied by the mask from that furst picture? Something to invoke the image of a spellcaster is all.
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Re: Interest Check [OVA]

Post by EpicEclipse » Sun Jun 24, 2018 12:04 am

Can't actually see the picture in question. :/ Probably the hosting site.

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Re: Interest Check [OVA]

Post by Doctor Malsyn » Sun Jun 24, 2018 12:40 am

Doctor Malsyn wrote:
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Re: Interest Check [OVA]

Post by MacynSnow » Sun Jun 24, 2018 12:48 am

I was thinking something like this,only with the White&Blue coloring of the dude singing....plus i'm a fan of a good looking Ascot. :D
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Re: Interest Check [OVA]

Post by EpicEclipse » Sun Jun 24, 2018 12:55 am

Doctor Malsyn wrote:
Sun Jun 10, 2018 6:33 am
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So mask like that with a long-tailed (probably a wide hemmed one at that) military style coat, I can dig it.
MacynSnow wrote:
Sun Jun 24, 2018 12:48 am
I was thinking something like this,only with the White&Blue coloring of the dude singing....plus i'm a fan of a good looking Ascot. :D
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Ascots are underrated, though it does take a certain type to work it. That said, I think the picture works well enough.

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Re: Interest Check [OVA]

Post by RainOnTheSun » Sun Jun 24, 2018 2:15 am

Is there a specific number of "points" our characters should be built on before the transformation? Should we just tell you the attributes and weaknesses we want, and you'll decide how many we get?

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Re: Interest Check [OVA]

Post by EpicEclipse » Sun Jun 24, 2018 2:25 am

RainOnTheSun wrote:
Sun Jun 24, 2018 2:15 am
Is there a specific number of "points" our characters should be built on before the transformation? Should we just tell you the attributes and weaknesses we want, and you'll decide how many we get?
I'm not too concerned about it. As I mentioned before, you want the sum of your abilities to be within 5 of the sum of your weaknesses

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Re: Interest Check [OVA]

Post by Doctor Malsyn » Sun Jun 24, 2018 2:30 am

Within 5? I thought it was an exact. Might have some spare to play with then...
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Re: Interest Check [OVA]

Post by EpicEclipse » Sun Jun 24, 2018 2:39 am

Doctor Malsyn wrote:
Sun Jun 24, 2018 2:30 am
Within 5? I thought it was an exact. Might have some spare to play with then...
I mean, I COULD be super strict and say it has to be 0 Sum, but the default mode has it at a loose match, as long as you are within 5, you're good.

All I ask is you be sparing about rank 4 and 5 abilities and rank 3 weaknesses. Have a really good reason for them. You'll also have Transform, a few ranks of it in fact, but I wouldn't worry about it too much, since it's a mandatory thing I'm adding.

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